Dexter.
- You say Crime, I say Punishment.
- Right and wrong is too subjective. I prefer dead and alive.
- Murder is like alcohol; an acquired taste but highly addictive.
- One good crime deserves another.
- Murder is such an ugly word. I prefer life extinguishing
- I just do what everyone wishes someone else would.
- What I do must be done. The fact that I enjoy it is just a bonus.
- If you love what you do, you will never work a day in your life.
- Balance sometimes requires shedding seven or so lbs
- Death is inevitable. I simply expedite that inevitability.
Law can get in its own way. I am the detour
Murder is such an ugly word. I prefer life extinguishing.
ReplyDeleteDo you have a replacement for the word extinguishing? You don't have to put the word "life" either. The word extinguishing just doesn't feel right.
Your not so strong lines are the following:
I just do what everyone wishes someone else would.
If you love what you do, you will never work a day in your life.
Balance sometimes requires shedding seven or so lbs.
Everything else works. This could be a multi-integrated campaign with more than 3 media. Try one for an online banner.
Very nice lines. Keep it up.
How do you like : Murder is an ugly word; I prefer eradicate.
ReplyDelete- You say Crime, I say Punishment.
ReplyDeleteThe following are great. Good contrast and good rythm. I feel though, as if they say too much.
How do you feel about them if you take away some of the dexter half. Here's what I mean
BEFORE: Right and wrong is too subjective. I prefer dead and alive.
AFTER: Too subjective.
I prefer dead and alive.
BEFORE: Right and wrong is too subjective. I prefer dead and alive.
AFTER:
BEFORE: Right and wrong is too subjective. I prefer dead and alive.
AFTER:
BEFORE: Right and wrong is too subjective. I prefer dead and alive.
AFTER: Like a drink, acquired taste but highly addictive.
(although initially something is acquired _____ then becomes addictive)
BEFORE: One good crime deserves another.
LOVE IT: what ever goes along with this MUST be auditory. (We need the placement, imagery, lighting, or the special effects. This is STRONG))
HUMOUROUS: Murder is such an ugly word. I prefer life extinguishing
THE FOLLOWING:
- I just do what everyone wishes someone else would.
- What I do must be done. The fact that I enjoy it is just a bonus.
Sequences are cool. Its an equation & it creates adrenaline . Either way, the interest is there. Which ever way you take it - do it well. Like entertainment versus suspenseful....
Bonus points (for doing what everyone else wishes
........You could make it into a game . (honest but true) refer to the brief and Dark humor or Dark comedy.
........You turn the quote against the reader. Edging the borderline and offensive to most people.... but fans of dexter.
- If you love what you do, you will never work a day in your life.
too much old man chinese proverb wisdom. (Which by the way is ancient and respectful.. but not so much for Dexter)
HUMOROUS: (or could be)
- Balance sometimes requires shedding seven or so lbs
This is TRUE. .. Forward and simply put. .. It's like, "Yea, we couldn't fit you in the vehicle, so we've all decided to cut your leg off."
Complicated, lots to think about:
Law can get in its own way. I am the detour
Nice work. Keep rockin on.
(michele)
One MORE thing! Regarding:
ReplyDelete- Balance sometimes requires shedding seven or so lbs
THink about the concept of balance. Go back to the old days when a balance scale was used. Something remains constant and somethings gotta go.
Theres something "mad - evil - scientist" tone in here.
What other Straight forward and un-buttered truths are there?